KISS ME, SAILOR

Published June 1, 2012 by rochellewisoff

Another Friday has come. I found this photo prompt the most challenging one yet. Thanks, Doug and Madison. I love a challenge!

After a forbidden night in heaven Daniel stretched in the down sleeping bag. The mountain air chilled his face as he watched the sun rise over the snow-dusted volcano.

Loath to wake her, he filled his eyes with her image for just another breath. Ebony hair haloed her high-boned cheeks and full lips.

Self-satisfied, he grinned. Sooner or later the army would be sent to fight the Krauts. Not him. He couldn’t wait for Christmas luaus in paradise.

“Kiss me, sailor,” she whispered.

“Okalani, it’s 6:30. I gotta get back to Pearl before Skipper realizes I’m AWOL.”

32 comments on “KISS ME, SAILOR

  • Dear Rochelle,You rolled back the years perfectly to a time and place both peaceful and perilous. Kiss Me, Sailor was wonderfully imagined and lovingly rendered. Well done.Aloha,Doughttp://ironwoodwind.wordpress.com/2012/06/01/poliahu-at-dawn/

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  • The start and idea is lovely, but I found the tone of the sailor's dialog a bit jarring when compared to the rest of the piece. After a few sips of coffee I wonder if it is necessary? The story might be more powerful if it ended on "Kiss me sailor,"

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  • Good images, and descriptive scene of a sailor and his girlfriend unknowing of things yet to come in their future. History gives us all ideas galore to write about and create new scenarios or possibilities. Mine is based on the sulfuric cauldrons we saw at YNP, Wy. and the 'big' eruption scientists believe is just short years away from happening. Amazing to see. http://jemj47.wordpress.com/reflections

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  • I liked everything about, the description of the girl, the period setting, the whole nine yard. Well done!You've been to mine. Here's the link for othershttp://russellgayer.blogspot.com/

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  • Love the "historical" story…love the title. Let's hope he could not resist another kiss, went AWOL and one of the lucky ones to miss the "Attack." I'm passing on this one. I did get an idea but suffering with a terrible migraine the last two days. See you next week.

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